Rejection #4 Artellus Ltd
I got to this quickly - I'm sorry it needs more dazzle to compete in a very competitive mainstream market - the dialogue seems flat - many undeveloped good ideas. But there are some things brought up as ornaments with no narrative purpose.
Sorry - you seem to have a good audience already - reactions to fiction is always subjective of course - good luck.
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